考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第四篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had bought in your department stores last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswomans attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the televisions fault, she said.Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another replace it, and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had (刪除)bought in your department stores last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswomans attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the televisions fault, she said(這里應該再指出一個問題，而非第一個問題的論據).Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another(刪除) replace it(加with another one), and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　2分

　　同學你好，要正確理解in the first place 和in addition 的邏輯關系，這無論是在大作文還是在小作文中都是非常重要的。此外，該段的最后一句應該寫，這種情況對你造成的不便。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第四篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had bought in your department stores last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswomans attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the televisions fault, she said.Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another replace it, and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had (刪除)bought in your department stores last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswomans attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the televisions fault, she said(這里應該再指出一個問題，而非第一個問題的論據).Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another(刪除) replace it(加with another one), and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　2分

　　同學你好，要正確理解in the first place 和in addition 的邏輯關系，這無論是在大作文還是在小作文中都是非常重要的。此外，該段的最后一句應該寫，這種情況對你造成的不便。