考研英語待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well.On the one hand,what I have

　　studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered.On

　　the other hand,I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work

　　or the daily life. Besides,I have worked as a parttime staff in the IBM.So I reckon

　　that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly.Whats more,

　　enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of my informationis presented.

　　Finally,it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being

　　interviewed so that I can further express myself.I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a senior student from the Department of Computer Science of Peking University. I am writing this letter to express my favour for the position as a software engineer which is advertised in(用on) your website.

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well. On the one hand, what I have studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered. On the other hand, I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work or the daily life. Besides, I have worked as a parttime(part-time) staff in the IBM. So I reckon that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly. Whats more, enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of(去掉，detail是個及物動詞)my informationis(拼寫錯誤)presented(這個詞用在這里想要表達什么呢?現在的信息應該是present information).Finally,(這個詞建議去掉) it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being interviewed so that I can further express myself. I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點評：8-9分寫的很不錯!條理清楚，內容充實。注意以上幾個細節性的問題。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well.On the one hand,what I have

　　studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered.On

　　the other hand,I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work

　　or the daily life. Besides,I have worked as a parttime staff in the IBM.So I reckon

　　that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly.Whats more,

　　enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of my informationis presented.

　　Finally,it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being

　　interviewed so that I can further express myself.I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a senior student from the Department of Computer Science of Peking University. I am writing this letter to express my favour for the position as a software engineer which is advertised in(用on) your website.

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well. On the one hand, what I have studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered. On the other hand, I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work or the daily life. Besides, I have worked as a parttime(part-time) staff in the IBM. So I reckon that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly. Whats more, enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of(去掉，detail是個及物動詞)my informationis(拼寫錯誤)presented(這個詞用在這里想要表達什么呢?現在的信息應該是present information).Finally,(這個詞建議去掉) it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being interviewed so that I can further express myself. I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點評：8-9分寫的很不錯!條理清楚，內容充實。注意以上幾個細節性的問題。