SAT作文中間段修改實例講解
SAT作文中間段修改實例講解
三 When we came back to Suzhou, I began to work harder on my tennis training. Everyday I went to the tennis court after school. From 5p.m. to 8p.m., I 1exert all my strength at training. Everyday I was still training 2while my teammates went home with their parents.
分析：
1 時態的問題請大家一定要注重，確保前后一致。
2 在看這句的時候，突然覺得作者有一點感傷了，看到同學們都和爸媽一起回去了。
3 總體上說訓練是一個把不好的記憶變成好記憶的重要過度，還得添加筆墨來加強場景感。
修改：
After returning to my hometown, days went on as usual. But that failed experience let me realize that as a tennis player, there was still a long way before me. In order to fill the gap between professional athletes and me, I became harder on myself. Everyday after school I could be spotted walking into the stadium and training painstakingly every night until the security guard hurried me up to leave there. Day in and day out, I kept practicing a series of skills---serving, forehand hitting and backhand returning, dampening one T-shirt after another. But no matter how tired I was, I always bore in mind an idea to beat that man who looked upon me one year ago. For almost a year, the total practice hours mounted to an amazing __ hours.
四 1 The second year, I joined my final match because my age was too old to join the match. I knew it was my final chance to defeat him. Luckily, we had a battle at the semi-final. 2 The time does not lose the person with high aspirations. Finally, I won the match with the score of 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5. At last, I said, 3 You are the loser now. Whats the feeling of it? Its my pound to interview you.
分析：
1 這個句子有點晦澀，應該是指這個年齡段的比賽以后你就不能參加了。
2 不理解這句話
3 呵呵，實在是太可愛了，我們就順應他的意思吧。
修改：
One year later, I entered, with great confidence, for the same competition, which would be my final performance since this game was prepared for children aged 8 to 12. After sweeping all my opponents, I entered the final and, not surprisingly, saw my greatest foe--- Hu, the defending champion. This time, he paled compared with a new me，who was not only skillful but also determined. Finally, after a two-hour fierce fight, I won the game by 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5.
五.總結例子 From my failure to my win, there is just one year. But it must be the experience I will never forget.
修改：
It takes me one year to turn the failed experience into a victory, during which I not only improved my skills in tennis but more importantly increased my courage to deal with troubles.
SAT作文中間段修改實例講解
三 When we came back to Suzhou, I began to work harder on my tennis training. Everyday I went to the tennis court after school. From 5p.m. to 8p.m., I 1exert all my strength at training. Everyday I was still training 2while my teammates went home with their parents.
分析：
1 時態的問題請大家一定要注重，確保前后一致。
2 在看這句的時候，突然覺得作者有一點感傷了，看到同學們都和爸媽一起回去了。
3 總體上說訓練是一個把不好的記憶變成好記憶的重要過度，還得添加筆墨來加強場景感。
修改：
After returning to my hometown, days went on as usual. But that failed experience let me realize that as a tennis player, there was still a long way before me. In order to fill the gap between professional athletes and me, I became harder on myself. Everyday after school I could be spotted walking into the stadium and training painstakingly every night until the security guard hurried me up to leave there. Day in and day out, I kept practicing a series of skills---serving, forehand hitting and backhand returning, dampening one T-shirt after another. But no matter how tired I was, I always bore in mind an idea to beat that man who looked upon me one year ago. For almost a year, the total practice hours mounted to an amazing __ hours.
四 1 The second year, I joined my final match because my age was too old to join the match. I knew it was my final chance to defeat him. Luckily, we had a battle at the semi-final. 2 The time does not lose the person with high aspirations. Finally, I won the match with the score of 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5. At last, I said, 3 You are the loser now. Whats the feeling of it? Its my pound to interview you.
分析：
1 這個句子有點晦澀，應該是指這個年齡段的比賽以后你就不能參加了。
2 不理解這句話
3 呵呵，實在是太可愛了，我們就順應他的意思吧。
修改：
One year later, I entered, with great confidence, for the same competition, which would be my final performance since this game was prepared for children aged 8 to 12. After sweeping all my opponents, I entered the final and, not surprisingly, saw my greatest foe--- Hu, the defending champion. This time, he paled compared with a new me，who was not only skillful but also determined. Finally, after a two-hour fierce fight, I won the game by 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5.
五.總結例子 From my failure to my win, there is just one year. But it must be the experience I will never forget.
修改：
It takes me one year to turn the failed experience into a victory, during which I not only improved my skills in tennis but more importantly increased my courage to deal with troubles.
